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Writing Samples
Band 4

Many people think it is very important to protect environment but they make no effort to do it themselves. Why does it happen? How to solve this problem?

t
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It
 is a
noticable phenomenen
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noticeable phenomenon
 that many
people
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 do not make a difference
on
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in
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 conserving
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environment
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the environment
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,
although
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 they
really
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are really
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 aware
the
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of the
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 significance. What
shoudn't
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shouldn't
 be neglected are the inner logic and deeper reasons behind it. Actually, it is difficult for
people
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 to insist on protecting
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environment
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the environment
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 consistently. What is noteworthy is that some measures contributing to
better
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a better
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environment
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 lack
praticability
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practicality
. As an exemplify,
low-carbon
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a low-carbon
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 life requires
people
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 to use public
transportations
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transportation
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, ride bikes
and
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, and
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 just go out on foot.
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However
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 many
people
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 have to drive, as it is hard to get on the subway and the bus
in
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during
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 rush hours
indeed
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apply
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. What's more, sorting waste is complex and cumbersome
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people
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 could attempt
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initially
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it initially
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, but they have too little time to do it. We can not overestimate the individual capability
that is
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 so weak that it can not improve
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environment
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the environment
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apparently
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, apparently
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. There are millions of
people
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 living on the earth,
it
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 means only a
little
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small
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 proportion of
people
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is
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are
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finited
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limited
 to make an effort.
Conserding
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Considering
 the limited ability
from
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of
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 these persons who confront impediments from every aspect of daily life, if the
government
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 could take action, it could definitely make great progress. The
government
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 is supposed to set relevant policy and invest more in environmental conservation. Enormous studies illustrate that there are more and more countries
place
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that place
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 an
emphysis
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emphasis
 on environmental pollution, and they achieve
remarkble succsess
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remarkable success
,
such
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 as China and Singapore, which reinforces the
indispensible
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indispensable
 role of the
government
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. In conclusion, only relying on individual capability is unrealistic
,
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;
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 the
government
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's efforts
is
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are
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 essential, which we should take into consideration.

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language
Check work for simple spelling and grammar. Fix errors that slow meaning, like 'conserve' and 'environment' and 'practicability'.
structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Use a simple outline: 1) issue, 2) reason, 3) fix, 4) example, 5) conclusion. Then write one idea per paragraph.
coherence
Connect ideas with clear links. Use words like because, so, and also to show why things happen and what they lead to.
content
Give a real example or data to back up a claim. Explain how the example shows the point.
idea
The essay raises the idea that government action is needed and not only individual effort.
content
There is a sense of problem and some link of cause and effect (practical barriers to green actions).
structure
There is a clear end that government work is important.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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