Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
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designers have a significant role in
individuals
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' taste in choosing their dress throughout the globe. I assume it is a negative development
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rooted in globalism and the modern worldview. Globalism's initial criterion was sameness; all
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should have similar tastes in all aspects,
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, their preferred clothes. In the early 1900s, in a short period of time, all nations became familiar with a certain type of dress for men and women
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were
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introduced by designers. It was a hidden pressure on citizens
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to select
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these products in order to be approved by society.
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, in Iran, no man was known as a respectable citizen if he did not put on
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a suit
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.
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, by passing time,
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tend to embrace what
fashion
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trends introduce to them
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fashion
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industry takes an unimaginable power in people's lives. I strongly believe it is a negative trend that leads to the demolition of diversity in
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' appearance. There are plenty of traditional and folk dresses throughout the world, namely, the Kimono in Japan, a vast variety of local dress in Iran, and the Sari in India, which are all put aside in closets, in order to be the same as others.
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sameness is associated with two strong vices,
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, the society missed out
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individuals
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' appearance diversity , and
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, the traditions that are known as spiritual heritage have been fading. In conclusion,
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fashion
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the fashion
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industry's power stems from globalism, which tends to destroy all traditions and folk aspects and taste in clothing. It harms the community's spiritual heritage and society slightly

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overall
Use a clear plan before writing. Start with your view, then add 2-3 ideas with one small example each, and finish with a short line.
coherence
Make each idea sit on its own paragraph. Use simple link words like and, but, for example, also.
task
Add a short counter point or a small good side of fashion to show balance, even if you keep a mainly negative view.
grammar
Check sentence form. Use simple pattern like Subject + verb + object. Keep words easy and clear.
task response
The essay shows a clear view that global fashion can harm tradition.
examples
You give real examples (suit in Iran, Kimono, Sari) to back your view.
coherence
The idea of loss of diversity and heritage fits the topic well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global
  • fashion
  • clothes
  • dress
  • wear
  • look
  • style
  • brand
  • label
  • shop
  • price
  • money
  • media
  • ads
  • post
  • like
  • world
  • culture
  • express
  • expression
  • culture
  • work
  • jobs
  • earth
  • environment
  • press
  • pressure
  • spend
  • buy
  • design
  • trend
  • brand
  • celeb
  • celebrity
  • internet
  • online
  • shop
  • social
  • media
  • fashion
  • trend
  • idea
  • choice
  • fit
  • color
  • color
  • cloth
  • fabric
  • hand
  • care
  • harm
  • good
  • bad
  • benefit
  • loss
  • balance
  • relation
  • impact
  • effect
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