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In recent years, many countries have introduced laws to make public transport free of charge. Do the advantages of free public transportation outweigh the disadvantages?

These days,
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several countries have introduced laws to make public transportation free of charge.
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this
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 trend brings a lot of
benefits
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 to
environment
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 and social,
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, it
also
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 presents certain financial and practical challenges. I personally disagree with
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energy.
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, the other
factors
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 opinions should be considered. On the one hand, introducing
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transportations
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transportation
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 for free
charge
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to residents can have several
benefits
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. When buses, trams are free, that time people are more likely to use them
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 of
private
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a private
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 car.
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, in Tallinn, Estonia,
car
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the car
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 usage rate fell by 10% after tree
transport
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 was introduced.
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,
this
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 reduces the number of traffic
jam
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jams
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,
crushes
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crashes
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, and other accidents.
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, there can be
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 view
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.
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 If
transport
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 is always free, overcrowding, damage, and government debt increase.
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, making public
transport
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 free can benefit both people and the environment.
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,
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 public
transport
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 free all the time can cause several problems. It can help protect the environment and make travel easier for everyone
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however
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 it may bring some issues to
transport
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 drivers
that
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because
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 they can’t get enough salary.
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, in cities like Luxembourg, the government spends millions each year to keep
transport
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 free, which is difficult for smaller countries to afford.
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,
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This
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 shows that making all
transport
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 free is not always sustainable. I believe it should be free for suitable countries.
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, the disadvantages of free public
transport
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 clearly outweigh its
benefits
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.
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,
although
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,
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 free public transportation brings
lot
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a lot
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 of brand
benefits
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, I believe that the first it should be taken to consider the country and for
suitableness
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.

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strategy
Plan your answer. Say your main view at the start and keep it in the rest of the essay.
writing
Use one idea per paragraph and link ideas with simple words like first, next, then, finally.
evidence
Give clear facts or examples and explain how they show your point.
content
You have a view on the topic and some good ideas.
structure
You try to show both sides (pros and cons).
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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