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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The map below
demonstrates
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shows
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 us
an
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apply
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in
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apply
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the town of
norbition
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Norbition
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, and
predicted
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the predicted
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 renovation of the site
Linking Words
Overall
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Overall,
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 the given predicted map is best for living
standarts
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standards
.
However
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 there will be built a lot of constructions It is crystal clear that the plan
is
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apply
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promises us to demolish every
factories
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factory
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 and replace them with apartments.
In inital
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Initially
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on
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, on
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 the west side of
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the roundabout
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roundabout
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roundabout,
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 there were only 3 factories. But now
they
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apply
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it is seen that they relocated them and changed
into
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them into
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 houses. In one hand on the
southernwest
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southwest
 side of the
roundabout
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roundabout,
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 the new shops will be added.
In
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On
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 one hand southern
east
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south-east
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 of the
roundabout
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roundabout,
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 the new medical centre
also
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seem
Correct subject-verb agreement
seems
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 between these two constructions . On the east driveaway
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,
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they added a playground and a school . Moving towards
rest
Correct article usage
the rest
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 of
map
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the map
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the
Punctuation problem
, the
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 number of
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 is increased from 2 to 3 .
Linking Words
However
Punctuation problem
However,
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 from
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the center
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center
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centre
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 roundabout on the
Correct your spelling
north driveaway
northdriveaway
Punctuation problem
northdriveaway,
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 they
predicting
Wrong verb form
are planning
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 to build a bridge over the river .
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Additionally
Aditionally
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Aditionally,
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 they are planning to build new living apartments in front of
bridge
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the bridge
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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