Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect environment. what is possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

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recent
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pollution of rivers, lakes and seas has been a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. Others may insist that air pollution may be a bigger problem,
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in my personal
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both of these problems are urgent to fix,
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due to
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my personal experience and love
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water
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inhabitants
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inhabitants,
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I personally believe that polluting lakes, rivers and seas should be our main concern
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higher
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vulnerability of
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inhabitants. On the one hand,
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what I want to point out
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is how easy it is to make your part
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helping to save the
water
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world and those who live in it. You may not even think about it
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in your everyday
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life,
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you can make
few
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a few
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small changes that are going to instantly bring a positive impact on
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the eco-friendlinest
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eco-friendlinest
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eco-friendliness
of your life. As you
know
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waste management is really important, which many
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European
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already
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by introducing laws about waste disposal, especially plastic disposal, as it is one of the most environmentally toxic substances, as
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decaying
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time may range from 200 years up to
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of thousands
years
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. So what
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highly recommend you
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do is to start throwing plastic in special
trash
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bins that are placed around your city, as
this
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simple act is going to make a big difference.
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,
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there is
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is
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effects
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the effects
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that
water
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pollution brings to people and animal life. In my personal
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experience,
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I
already have
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have already
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witnessed how
people
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people's
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carelessness
have
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resulted in destruction to
animals
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habitats
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an example
to
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this
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I want you to remind
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yourself
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of
trash
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islands that drift somewhere in the ocean.
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islands
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fully made of
trash
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, that may reach 1.6 million square
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in area,
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that
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is three times bigger than France
it self
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, they
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consist mainly of plastic and fishing nets

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structure
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro, then two small parts for causes and effects, and end with a brief closing.
content
Give 3-4 main causes and show how each one hurts life in water and in people.
language
Fix grammar and use short, clear sentences. Watch mistakes like 'is effects' and 'decaying time'.
coherence
Use linking words to help ideas fit, such as 'first', 'also', 'for example', 'but'.
mechanics
Check spelling and punctuation. Use capital at the start of a sentence and end with a full stop.
content
The idea to show why water harm life is good.
example
You give a real example of trash islands to show harm.
structure
You start to link ideas and show cause and effect.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • contamination
  • industrial discharge
  • untreated sewage
  • agricultural runoff
  • pesticides
  • oil spills
  • microplastics
  • eutrophication
  • algal blooms
  • marine dumping
  • bioaccumulation
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • public health
  • waterborne diseases
  • fishing industry
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental regulations
  • waste management
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