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The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart displays the recorded
populations
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 of
seals
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, whales and
dolphins
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 in the Gomera
Straits
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 between 2006 and 2018.
Overall
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,
dolphins
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 in the
Gormez
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Gomera
Straits
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 saw a dramatic increase over the 13-year period.
Whereas
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 whale and seal
numbers
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 fluctuated over the entire period. In 2006, Gormez
Straits
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 reported on the number of
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seals
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seal
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populations
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, with around 42
numbers
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. Over the years, it witnessed a sharp fluctuation; in 2018, it ended up with almost 45
numbers
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.
Dolphins
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 were reported in the Gomera
Straits
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 with approximately 15
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in 2006. Later on, it started to rise significantly, and reached the peak in 2018, with over 50
numbers
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.
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 the increase in the latter categories, whales experienced a slight growth over the period, hovering between 20-28
numbers
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. The highest amount of
populations
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 was
seals
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 in 2006, and the lowest was
dolphins
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,
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.
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 Over time,
seals
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 fell back
while
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 the other rose, and
then
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 became the second highest number of
populations
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, and
dolphins
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 overtook them and reached the top by 2018
, whales
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. Whales
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 remained stable with a negligible change over the decade.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words populations, seals, dolphins, straits, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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