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One of the most commonly shared consensuses these days is that the most favoured way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum permitted age for driving. Agree or Disagree?

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road safety,
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the
 minimum permitted age for driving is not a
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 streets should have all the
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actors
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safety.
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, it's not
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 to increase the minimum permitted age for driving because it's not the only reason.
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 youngsters have their right to drive. The most common reason for the
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accident
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 drivers and there
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actores
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actors
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then
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 the young people.
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, to improve road
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 there
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 many ways to do that
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 as the
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minimum
 age for driving, for
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accident
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fault
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 see right.
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 point of view
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disagree with the statement side. In conclusion, it's
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 to find a
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solution
 to improve it
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 the suggestion in the
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statement
 I disagree with it and
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 not a good idea.
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 were
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studies
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the university
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university
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 of Hull,
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 the young drivers had the minimum number of
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penalties
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task response
Plan your answer. State your view in the first line. Then give two clear reasons with one simple example for each. End with a short, clear conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence cohesion
Make the essay in 4 or 5 short parts. Each part has one idea. Link parts with clear words like first, next, but, however, so.
task response
You show a clear view that you disagree with the statement.
coherence cohesion
You use a real life example to back your point.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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