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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables provide data about the
sales
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 figures for two
Fairtrade
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 products in the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden in two separate years.
Overall
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,
sales
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 of
Fairtrade
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 coffee rose in all five countries,
while
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 there was mixed success for
similarly
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 labelled bananas, and the leading country in each table had significantly higher
sales
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 than the rest.
Sales
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 of
Fairtrade
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 coffee were relatively modest in 1999, and Switzerland was the largest consumer with 3$
million
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 in
sales
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. Despite
this
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 figure doubling in 2004, the UK rose from third place ( with 1.5$
million
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) to lead the table with 20$
million
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 worth of
sales
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 in the same year. A figure that was considerably higher than in any other country.
Although
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 the three remaining countries
also
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 saw an increase, these were marginal, with gains of between 0.2 and 0.7
million
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 dollars. With
Fairtrade
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 bananas, Switzerland was again the leader in 1999, and dominated
this
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 table in both years, with
sales
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 increasing from 15$
million
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 to a striking 47$
million
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.
Although
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 considerably lower, the UK and Belgium saw similar growth in
this
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 category, increasing by just over 5 times their 1999 figures to reach 5.5$ and 4$
million
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 respectively.
In contrast
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, Sweden and Denmark experienced a drop in
sales
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, with the 2004 figures (1$
million
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 and 0.9$
million
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) almost half of those of 5 years earlier. qale chqpti

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, fairtrade, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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