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no longer necessary, because children can get so much information available through Internet, and they can study just as well at home. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Rohrer and colleagues noted that each β -
adrenergic
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β-adrenergic
 receptor (β-AR) subtype is necessary for development and cardiac function. Their idea comes from the limits of
drugs
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drug
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 selectivity, since different receptors are found in the same tissues, so it is hard to tell each role apart. Even with
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, β-AR agonists are known to raise heart rate and contractility,
there
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but there
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 is still a doubt about the subtype behind
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 effect. Some studies saw both β1-and β2-ARs in the response, others mainly tied to
β1- AR
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β1-AR
.

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structure
Add a clear opening line that states your view on the topic. Include a brief closing sentence.
coherence
Use link words to show how ideas go together, such as first, also, but, and so.
content
Give more clear reasons and more proofs or facts to back up points.
accuracy
Make sure these big words are used in the right way and easy to read. If a term is hard, explain it simply.
content
The text keeps to the science topic.
structure
There are small links that help flow.
content
The idea is clear, even if short.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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