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Band 4.5

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a
big
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large
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amount
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number
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 of
news
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 sources
such
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 as
,
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 radio, television
or
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and
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 newspapers that
everyday
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every day
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brings
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bring
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 thousands of new information to the population. Many
people
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believes
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believe
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 that
these
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this
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news
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 has nothing to do with them and think it is unworthy to read or watch it. Even though there
is
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are
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 many useless
communication
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communications
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circuling
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circulating
, I strongly disagree with
this
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 point of view. Everything
that is
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 communicated in media programs
are
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is
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 about
people
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´s lives. Is it true that there is a significant part that could be considered useless, as in
the
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apply
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mordern
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modern
 days
exist
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there are
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 a lot of programs showing gossip about famous
people
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 or even a
big
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large
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 amount of
advertisments
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advertisements
, and it is not
necessary
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necessarily
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 important for everyone.
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, not everything presented is related
with
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to
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 everyone´s everyday life.
However
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, many of
it
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them
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 probably
has
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have
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 or will have a direct or indirect impact
in
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on
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 your routine somehow. An example was when
happened
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the boom in the
news
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 about the Ukraine war
.
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happened.
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 Someone living in another country could
thought
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think
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 that there was no connection to their living as they were far away.
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, a few weeks later, many countries were receiving thousands of refugees to shelter. Another factor was at the supermarkets, where various products had a significant increase in
the
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prices
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price
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.
This
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 situation had an unpleasant financial impact
in
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on
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 many families. In my opinion, the
news
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are
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is
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 extremely important for
all
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the
population
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entire population
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 and everyone should be aware
about
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of
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 what is happening around the world. It does not mean that
people
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 should be connected all the time in all the media
type
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types
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 of
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news
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media news
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, but
choose
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choosing
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 a credible platform to follow the events is of
highly
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 importance. In conclusion, there
is
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a considerable
news
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 platforms that only
shows
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show
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 off superficial information.
However
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, there
is
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are
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 plenty more serious and credible ones
,
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apply
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 that
people
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 should spend time reading or watching, as
many
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much
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 of the
news
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 presented has a big impact
in
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on
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 their personal lives.

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structure
Make your main idea clear in each paragraph with a strong topic sentence.
coherence
Link ideas more clearly: use connecting words like however, also, as a result.
content
Use examples that directly relate to your claim and explain how they affect readers.
language
Check grammar in your writing: fix subject-verb and plural form errors.
style
Use shorter sentences for easy reading and less misread.
style
Avoid long lines; break ideas into small chunks for easier follow.
content
You take a clear position against the claim and keep it through.
content
You use concrete examples (Ukraine war, price rise) to show impact.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with introduction, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Informed
  • Current events
  • Public awareness
  • Local news
  • Global issues
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Bias
  • Community
  • Public safety
  • Health advisories
  • Market trends
  • Traffic updates
  • Weather forecasts
  • Educate
  • Raise awareness
  • Opinion formation
  • Decision making
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