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The line graph demonstrates the number of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph demonstrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the
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 of
visitors
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. Another interesting point was that
visitors
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 who stayed on cruises were lower than those who stayed on the island. Looking at the details, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed on the island started at 900,000
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 in 2010,
then
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 there was a level off over the year,
then
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 there was a graduate increase between 2010 and 2013 had about 1.3
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visitors
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.
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there was a vary over the next 3 years until 2015 and having 1.5
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 travelers.
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, there was a fluctuation and had decrease in 2016 to 1.3
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visitors
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,
then
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 there was an increase in 2017 where it was around 1.5
million
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tourists
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. If we look at the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who were on cruises started with around 400,000
visitors
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 in 2010.After that it leveled off over the next 3 years and had 500,000
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 in 2013.
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there was a graduate upward where it got 2
million
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tourists
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 in 2017. And the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 who were in Caribbean increased over the period, it started with 1
million
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tourists
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 and in 2017 it was 3.5
million
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tourists
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.

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planning
Plan first. Make a short plan that has an overall view, then two small paragraphs on main points.
accuracy
Check numbers and keep them in order. Use the same set of figures for each year where you say them.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Use 'it rose', 'it fell', 'it stayed the same', 'it leveled off' instead of hard forms.
cohesion
Link ideas well. Use words like first, then, after that, finally, in total.
lexical
Keep words simple and clear. Do not mix many ideas in one sentence.
overview
It gives an overall view and includes data about both parts of the graph.
content
There is a clear try to compare island stay with cruise stay.
data
Numbers are used to show trends in places.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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