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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that difference is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Whether or not should we leave our safe place to face
change
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 is always a considerable topic. Some
people
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 may think that spend our lives doing the same
things
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 and avoiding
change
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 is more confortable.
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,there are
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 some
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 support that it is worth challenging and meaningful to try something different and new.
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 essay aims to discuss both different views and give a
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 look about changes. Advocates of doing the same
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 believe that it can play to one's strengths and focus on what one good at. It is scarce and valuable to find self-strength and bring one's superiority into full play.
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 as the employment as a professional chairman. All the thing he or she need to do is to lead a company to achieve their goals efficiently. They might don't have deeper professional major knowledge, but what's more important is that they have the ability to recognize the employee's weakness, to develop their strength and
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 to develop a emotional harmony and self-motivated atmosphere. It refers that they are always doing the similar
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, but because of the similarity and familiarity, they always play it well. It reveals that stay in the safe place and regularly doing the own perfession's business can cultivate their capabilities and achieve a sucessful career. In the other hand, there are still some
people
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 prefer to adjust themselves in various changing environment, facing the
change
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 bravely. The whole world is always changing, the old problems gone, and the brand-new problems is changing very rapidly. So it is very important for the modern
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 to cultivate their adaptability. With
change
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, we will face a majority of coming-up different problems,
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 as how should we do to
change
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 our path in the whole market to adapt the interaction of demand and supply. In the meanwhile, how can we do to lead the team to achieve our goals in a changing world. It is quite different and calling the needs to cultivate the capabilities in all the fields. In that way, it clearly claims that the difference is a good thing that can enhance our abilities in all the fields, not only focus on the
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 that we familiar with. In conclusion, both two different dimensions and opinions about
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 topic have their own rationality. But in my point of view, I think that the benefits of facing changes is overweight the advantages of stay in the safe place with same
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. In
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 changing world, whether or not we facing a huge
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, we should always remind us to improve our own ability to catching up with the era of rapid
change
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.

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task response
Make your answer clear from start. In the opening, state your view and what you will talk about. In the conclusion, restate your view clearly.
coherence
Use simple links to move ideas. Start each paragraph with one main idea. Use words like but, however, also to show the change of thought.
content
Give more strong points and real life examples. Explain why each idea matters and add a short detail.
language
Watch grammar and be precise. Use easy and exact words. Short sentences help to avoid mistakes.
content
There is an effort to discuss both sides.
argument
An opinion is included at the end.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some examples are used to show ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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