Some people believe that children should be involved in making their school rules.others say that only adults should make the school's rules. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion

The society has changed greatly,
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inculdes
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includes
the way it deals with
children
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. Some people still think that
adults
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are only allowed to make the
school
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's
rules
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.
However
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, others think that
children
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should participate in making their
school
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rules
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. Each group has their point of view. When it
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to my opinion, I
belive
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believe
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that
children
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should be
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involved
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partially in making some of their
school
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rules
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. People who are against the idea of involving
childrens
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children
in making
school
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rules
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think that
children
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lack
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the ability to make
such
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decisions.
Due to
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their minimum life
experqience
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experience
and limited ability
of making
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rules
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, they shouldn't be involved. They may not be able to consider their benefits when making
rules
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.
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, when it
come
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to banning food
whith
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with
high sugar content and saturated fat, most of the
children
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won't make a rule to stop selling
such
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products at
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school's
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the school's
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cantin
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canteen
. The same situation would be repeated if a
decition
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decision
need
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needs
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to be taken for increasing the physical
activites
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activities
at
school
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because most of them prefer to spend more time in digital entertainment like video games.
On the other hand
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, people who want
children
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to be involved in making
school
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rules
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have a
storong
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strong
point of view on
the
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apply
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that topic. They
belive
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believe
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that
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involvement will
defenitly
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definitely
make their
childrens
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children
good decision makers in the future. It will teach them how to consider all the positive and negative aspects of any idea and how to balance them to make a good rule.
This
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can
leat
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lead
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to
build
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building
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a strong personality
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their
childerens
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children
. Another reason for allowing them to make their
rulse
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rules
is that the lifestyle has dramatically
chaned
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changed
in
the
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recent years.
Adults
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had a completely different life when they
where
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were
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children
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so
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, so
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that
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they aren't expected to make good
rules
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for
children
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living at
this
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time.
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, technology was not
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involved
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in the
curiculum
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curriculum
twenty years ago
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as
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, as
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a
result
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result,
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adults
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may not make great
rules
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a bout involving technology
at
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in
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schools.
Children
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may have a wider
knowlege
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knowledge
an
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and
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experient
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experience
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at
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in
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such
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a topic and a better
rule
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role
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. In conclusion,
childeren
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children
should be allowed to make their
school
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rules
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in a partial way. And
adults
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should participate in
such
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rules
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and listen to their
childrens
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children
.They should share their life
experince
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experience
with their
children
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and
coporate
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cooperate
to make
balanved
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balanced
rules
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.

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grammar
Fix many spelling and grammar errors. For example, change 'belive' to 'believe', 'cantin' to 'canteen', and 'equ' to proper words.
structure
Make a clear plan before you write: one intro, two body parts for the two ideas, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example' to show how ideas go together.
content
Give more strong and specific examples for each view to show why you think so.
grammar
Keep tense and noun form right. Check 'children', 'rules', 'rule', 'participate'.
vocabulary
Check spelling of key words and be careful with 'experience', 'decisions', 'activities'.
content
You show a clear view that both sides exist.
style
You use simple sentences which are easy to read.
content
You give some examples to explain points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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