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the graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the information and write 150 words.

the graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the information and write 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the levels of the main kinds of fuel (petroleum, coal, natural gas) that are produced in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
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 are measured in energy from one million tonnes of oil.
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, the
production
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 of petroleum and coal was almost equal at the start of the period and opposite
at the end
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 of it.
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 the
production
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 of natural gas was almost the same for the first nine
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, and started to grow gradually from 1990 to 2000. With regards to the amount of petroleum produced, it began at around 85
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 and
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 peaked at 140
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 in 1984 before falling gradually to 100
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 in 1989. The second increase started in 1992
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 and fluctuated slightly at 100
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 for 5
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, from 1995 to 2000.
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, approximately 80
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 of coal were produced during 2
years
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 from 1981 to 1983, after which the figure fell dramatically to 40
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 in the next two
years
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. The
production
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 of coal was increased gradually from 1984 to 1986 and reached
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60
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, and stayed the same for the next 3
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. Since
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 year, the coal
production
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 has decreased bit by bit for the rest of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, production, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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