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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. The three meals are breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. The three meals are breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks.
These pie charts compare the percentage of three types of nutrients in Americans' meals, which may be harmful if consumed excessively.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the largest proportion of
sodium
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 and saturated fats was in
breakfast
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,
whereas
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snacks
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 included the highest
amount
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 of
sugar
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. The highest
amount
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 of
sodium
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 was in
breakfast
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, at about 40%. Almost 30% of the
sodium
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 was reported to be used in lunch.
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, the percentage of
sodium
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 which was consumed in dinner and
snacks
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 was equal, around 14%.
Moreover
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, less than 40% of saturated fat was used in
breakfast
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. People took around 25% of saturated fat in their lunch and
snacks
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.
In contrast
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, dinner had the smallest proportion of
this
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 ingredient, at about 16%.
In addition
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, there were approximately 40% of added
sugar
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 in
snacks
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,
while
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breakfast
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 accounted for 23%.The
amount
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 of added
sugar
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 in lunch and dinner was 16% and 19%, respectively. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the
amount
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 of added
sugar
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 in
snacks
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 was more than in other meals, and
breakfast
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 contained the largest
amount
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 of
sodium
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 and saturated fat.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, breakfast, snacks, amount, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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