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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The two maps illustrate the development of the waterfront
are
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area
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 in
the
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Darwin
town
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from 2009
t0
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to
 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
area
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 experienced significant changes, with some facilities added. The waterfront became more urbanised and modern. In 2009, on the Northern
side
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,
while
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 the school, convention, and the lake remained unchanged,
the
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a
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 new small swimming pool
built
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instead
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 of
industrial
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the industrial
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area
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.
Whereas
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, on the southern
side
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, the large industrial
area
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,
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 was removed to
plants
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plant
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 more trees in order to reduce pollution and have quality air.
Moreover
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, a new footpath was added on the south to
linked
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 with the harbour
in
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 the right
side
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 of the map.
On the other hand
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, the university building was constructed
to
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on
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 the left
side
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 of the
area
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.
Additionally
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, the residential
area
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 in the
center
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centre
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 was expanded to
be
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include
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 six buildings.
According to
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 the fishing
area
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 and the two swimming pools remained unchanged
to
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in
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 the East part
and
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, and
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 the sea
still
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is still
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in
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at
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 the bottom. Notably, there
was
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were
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 only two swimming pools to
became
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become
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 three pools by 2014 with different sizes.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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