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the chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.

the chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
The bar graph illustrates the figures of mobile
phones
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 and
landlines
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 per hundred individuals in seven different countries.
Overall
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, it is evident that
te
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apply
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mobile
phones
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has
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have
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 the maximum proportion in Italy, Sweden, the UK, and Germany. But
in
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apply
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landlines
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 are
famouse
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famous
 in three other
rigeions
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regions
. In Italy, the
number
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 of mobile
phomes
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phones
 is 90,
while
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 in
case
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the case
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 of Canada it is about 38. The figures
of
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for
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 mobile
phones
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 in Sweden, the UK and Denmark are 88, 86, and 81
respectively
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, respectively
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. Regarding
Germany
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Germany,
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 the
number
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 of
phones
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 was 70,
while
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 it was nearly 39 in the US.
However
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, the figures of
landlines
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 were
in
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at
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it's
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it
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 peak in Sweden
,
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apply
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 and Germany around 79 and 60 by
respect
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respectively
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. The UK has a significant
number
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 of 59. Over 40 was the
number
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 of
landlines
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 in
remaining
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the remaining
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 countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, landlines, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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