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Discuss two possible ways to encourage more people to visit the local museum and say which one you think would be more effective

There has recently been a lot of discussion about how to get more
people
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 to visit our local
museum
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.
It is clear that
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 museums are important for learning about our history and culture, but not many
people
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 go there anymore. After attending a community meeting on
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 topic, I would like to discuss two possible ways to solve
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 problem
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 visiting schools to talk to students and improving the
museum
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’s
website
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. First of all, visiting schools could help make young
people
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 more interested in the
museum
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. Many students do not know much about it, so short presentations or fun activities could encourage them to come. If the
museum
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 offered free entry for school groups or small workshops, it could attract both students and their families.
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 would make culture and history more exciting and closer to young
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’s lives. Another suggestion is to improve the
museum
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’s
website
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. The current one is quite slow and not very attractive. A modern and easier-to-use site with nice pictures, short videos, and clear information about exhibitions would definitely help.
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, an online booking system or virtual tours could make the
museum
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 more popular, especially among those who like using technology. Taking everything into account, I believe that improving the
website
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 would have a bigger effect. In today’s digital world,
people
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 often look for information online
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so a good
website
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 could really increase the number of visitors.

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Add more steps for each idea. Say what to do first, next, and how to check it works.
position
Make the end part stronger. State clearly which choice will work best and why.
language
Care about grammar and how you join ideas. Use more linking words to keep the flow.
structure
Two ideas are shown and a clear choice is made.
linking
Good use of linking words like First of all, Another, Taking everything into account.
clarity
The writing is easy to read with simple words.
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