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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map provides key information about the site of a
college
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 in 2006 and the present day.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Lynwich
College
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 in 2006 had few services.
In addition
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. It is not divided into specific stations,
whereas
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college
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 now, the plan is clearer and has multiple spaces.
According to
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 what is shown in the plan for the
college
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 in 2006, if you want to come to the
college
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 building from the road through the car park and enter the
library
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, on the right
side
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, there
was
Wrong verb form
is
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 a path going to two buildings. Next to the
library
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, there was a sports field. It is noticeable that there were several trees surrounding the campus. In terms of the new
college
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, there were many services, beginning with a bus stop beside the road, with a specific road leading to the centre of campus.
Furthermore
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, on the car park
side
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, there is a small special
side
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 for bike storage. It is noticeable that the sports centre has replaced the old
library
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 ,
whereas
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sports
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the sports
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 field remains stable in the same place. In the
college
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 centre, there is a cafeteria. There is no change in both building sites, but on the other
side
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, the
library
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 building was moved to the corner between the buildings.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, library, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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