The pie charts below show the age groups of the users on different social media paltforms in Australia in 2011

The three pie charts below show the information about how many people used different social media apps in percentages in

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Australia

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between 2011 and 2013.

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the 5

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types of platforms experienced different figures in the time period.

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facebook

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and

twitter

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kept going

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the top places,

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users had the lowest percentage compared to others. As the pie chart shows, the number one platform was

facebook

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in all 3 years. In 2011, that experienced 59%,

decreasing gradually

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gradually decreasing

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49%

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38%

in 2012 and 2013, respectively. Regarding

, twitter

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Twitter, twitter

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had a slight increase each year at 2%, growing from 21 to 25%.

Linkedln

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experienced almost the same

grow

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twitter

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, but starting from 10% and finishing at 15%. At the same

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google

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and

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were different. In 2011, they both had the same number (5%), and they both

together

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apply

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experienced

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the

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in 2011.

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, in 2012,

google

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doubled, but

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grew just to 6%.

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2013,

google+

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and

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finished at 14 and 8%, respectively.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

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Varied vocabulary

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Some people believe that sleeping is the only method which allows people to get enough relaxation. Others belleve that physical activities such as playing games and exercises also provide enough relaxation. Discuss both views and provide your opinion.

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