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The table and chart show the time spent on leisure and household activities by men and women in a country in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and chart show the time spent on leisure and household activities by men and women in a country in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the information regarding the average daily
time
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, in
minutes
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, spent by
men
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 and
women
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 on recreation and household chores in a nation in 2008.
Overall
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, both genders allocate the majority of their leisure
time
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 to watching TV, videos, and listening to the radio. Meanwhile,
women
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 consistently surpass
men
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 in almost all home-related tasks, except for repairing. Concerning leisure activities,
men
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 spent 137
minutes
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 per day on TV, video, and radio, exceeding
women
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’s figure of 118
minutes
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, showing that both devoted the largest proportion of their leisure
time
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 to
this
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 category.
In contrast
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, reading revealed only a slight difference, at 18
minutes
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 for
men
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 and 19
minutes
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 for
women
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.
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,
men
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 were slightly more active in sports, reaching 15
minutes
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, nearly 1.5 times that of females (11
minutes
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). Regarding domestic duties,
women
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 spent the most
time
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 on cooking and dishwashing, recording over 75
minutes
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, more than twice the male level of around 30
minutes
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. They
also
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 spent approximately 35
minutes
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 on shopping and 30
minutes
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 on washing and ironing clothes,
while
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 their counterparts recorded roughly 25 and 10
minutes
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 per day, respectively.
In contrast
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, repairing tasks accounted for the lowest female figure, at under 10
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, about half of
men
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’s 20
minutes
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, minutes, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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