the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
The two maps illustrate
how
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what
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islip
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Islip
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town centre
look
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looks
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like today and the development that
it
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is
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planned to
occured
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occur
in the future .
Overall
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,
islip town
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Islip Town
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would
experienced
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experience
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a significant expansion .
new
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New
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buildings will be constructed in the countryside
, with
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. With
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this
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in mind , below that , the main
road
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will be converted into
pedestrains
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pedestrian
shops
,
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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, new houses will be established beside the park in the southeast .
Linking Words
to
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To
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begin with
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,
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the town centre today , the
country side
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countryside
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was consist
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consisted
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only of shops
and
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, and
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the main
road
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was
adjecent
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adjacent
to shops
, below
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. Below
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that , there was housing
and
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, and
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behind that
in
Punctuation problem
, in
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the east , there was a park
,
Punctuation problem
. In
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in contrast
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,
school
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the school
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was in the south of the main
road
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. turning to the layout of the planned developments , the
country side
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countryside
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replaced with
raw
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rows
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of stores and new buildings , the main
road
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has been changed to pedestrians only ,
furthermore
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, the
road
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has been completely changed with two
enterance
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entrances
from
west
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the west
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and
east
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the east
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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