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Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I agree
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 the development of the
internet
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 , public libraries are less necessary.There will be three main
reason
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about
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 that statement.
Fistly
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,the
internet
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provide
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provides
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 a lot of
e-
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book
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 options that allow the
reader
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without
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to read without
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 going out and just read anytime they want .In
the
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modern society,
people
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 are very busy in
dailylife
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daily life
 as they need to work,take care of
family
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their family
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 and just
multi-task
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 all the
time
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. Under those reasons
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they hardly
to have
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have time to
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time
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 go to the public library ,they always prefer to
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have ' me time ' after
time
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'after a busy day .
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, by the
internet
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 had developed it made
people
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 can read their
favoriate
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favourite
book
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 when they have free
time
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, like waiting bus
arrive
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to arrive
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 or before sleep. The development of
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internet
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the internet
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are
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has
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make
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made
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their me
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my
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time
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are
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more flexible. Next,the
internet
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provide
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provides
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 a
various
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variety
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 of
latest
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the latest
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 updated
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e-
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e-books
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book
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 that allow the
reader
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 to read
in
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 free.
In
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 some websites that provide different types of
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book
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books
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,
likes
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like
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 comic
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book
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books
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,
novel
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novels
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, travel
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book
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books
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 and more .
,
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Usually ,there
just
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required
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a
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an
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 email
to
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required to
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 sign up and a devices of phone
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device.
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Therefore
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The
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the
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reader
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 can find the
book
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 that they like and need .As the public libraries may not have the latest update on some
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book
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books
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 that make the
reader
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 sad about it .
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,there are more environmental-friendly of
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e-books
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book
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 than
the
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paper
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book
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books
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.
As making
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paper
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paper,
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 raw materials are
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tree
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trees
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,
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;
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 printing a
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 was neeeded to cut a number of
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tree
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trees
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.
Nowsday
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Nowadays
, more
people
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having
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 more
environmental
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 friendly
knowdelge
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knowledge
 and
being
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 a part to be
reduce
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reducing
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paper
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.They understand
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tree
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trees
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 can help
about
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 the
gobal
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global
 warming
propblem
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problem
,
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tree
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trees
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 can absorb the carbon
doxide
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dioxide
.
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,
people
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 are more prefer to read
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e-
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e-books
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book
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 and
aviod
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avoid
 wasting
paper
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 on printing a
book
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 .
To sum up
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, the
internet
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provide
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provides
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 free
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e-books
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book
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 to the
reader
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 that can allow them
read
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to read
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 at
anytime
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any time
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 and without going out .
Also
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e-books
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book
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 are more environmentally-friendly than
the
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paper
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book
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books
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.

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structure
Make a plan before you write. Write a short start that says your view. Then add two or three clear reasons.
content
Give clear reason and a simple example for each point. Do not list many ideas without proof.
grammar
Fix spell and grammar. Use short, plain sentences. Check for big mistakes.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'so', 'therefore'.
idea
Some idea are there, like the use of e books.
structure
You show a view and stick to it for most parts.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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