The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information of the numbers of participants for different activitirs at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
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number
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of individuals signing up a social event in Melbourne that holds various activities between the years 2000 and 2020.
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, we can see that the film club had the highest number of participants,
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music performances had the lowest.
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, we can notice that the year with the most people is almost 2015.
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the data shown, the film club was more popular than the other sections;
on the other hand
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, music performances were the least famous, with zero joiners
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the beginning of the period, but it kept increasing to reach almost 18. As for the martial arts category, it had a
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changing
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situation of decreasing and expanding throughout the timeline. For table tennis, it started with around 15, but
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it rose throughout the years to 70. As for amateur dramatics, it was at its
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it dropped to about 6.

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