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Writing Samples
Band 2

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend.Do you agree or disagree？

There is a common recognition that it is better for workers to shorten the working
week
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week,
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while
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 the weekend should be extended. From my perspective，I don't agree with
this
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 opinion that people must have more holiday
times
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time
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 in their daily week.
Excepting
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Except for
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 the weekend ，we
also
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 have lots of long
holiday
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holidays
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，just like
，
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apply
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Christmas
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Days
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Day
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 and lots of traditional
memory holidays
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holiday memories
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.So，we actually have many time to relax
ourselves
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apply
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. Actually,in the real working environment,staff must
to
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apply
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finish a complete
processes
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process
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 program ,sometimes
also
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 must finish it with
the group
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their
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 friends.If they have
long
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a long
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 weekend in
this
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 finishing period，
for example
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 ，work for 4
days
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 and rest for 3
days
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.
I
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I'm
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 afraid that they will forget the details and lose the working
statues
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statistics
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.
Therefore
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，I consider
to
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apply
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having 5
days
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 and 2
days
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 rest
is
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to be
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a
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apply
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scientific management. Every
coins
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coin
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 has two sides
，
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;
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in
the
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apply
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actually
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actual
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circumstance
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circumstances
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，some bosses will demand their employees to work overtime without any compensation. So every
laborer
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labourer
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 should keep in mind the self-claim
:
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apply
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to have adequate rest time.

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task response
Your view is clear, but you should state it in the first paragraph and add two or three strong reasons.
coherence
Improve flow by using simple linking words and a clear paragraph order. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and finish with a short conclusion.
stance
You show a clear stance against more holidays.
content
You give some reasons or facts to support your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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