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What qualities do you think are most important for achieving success in life? Provide at least three reasons to justify your view

Most
people
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 think achieving success in
life
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 is hard. We live in a society with
people
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 believing in stereotypes that make us think we’re not smart or good enough to achieve something we dream about.
This
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 essay will make you believe that having
qualities
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the qualities
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 I am going to present will help you be a successful person in
life
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.
Firstly
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, one of the most important traits to be successful is confidence. Without it,
people
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 are just not able to use opportunities, even those that are right in front of them. Imagine someone starting a cafe business, and suddenly they start facing
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challenges like no customers, unexpected costs coming from everywhere. These obstacles will make some
people
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 scared or
exhausted
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too exhausted
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 to keep going, but not those who stay enthusiastic and never stop believing in themselves.
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, creativity is the key to success. Being creative helps you make something innovative and even revolutionary
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coming
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 out of a small idea that might seem weird to others.
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, one night you dream of walking
on
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in
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 the air, your friends think the idea is crazy and impossible to become real. Two years
later
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later,
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 they see you on the news and understand that you made it. The crazy dream became your reality,
that
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which
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 made you successful in
life
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. In conclusion, having traits like confidence and creativity makes achieving success in
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 easier than it
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. Creativity makes you stand out from everyone else and
inspire
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inspires
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 others. Being confident helps overcome problems easily and never
stop
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stops
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 believing in yourself. These traits are a must for succeeding in
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, even when the
people
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 around you don't believe in you.

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planning
Plan your essay before you write. Make a simple plan with intro, body ideas, and a short finish.
development
Add a third reason to match the task and add a small but clear example for each idea.
language
Fix grammar and keep simple words. Use short sentences that are easy to read.
organization
Keep ideas in clear order. Use one idea per paragraph and a clear topic sentence.
structure
The essay uses clear order with First, Second and In conclusion.
content
The topic and view are stated in the introduction.
structure
The ending repeats the main idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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