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The maps below shows a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

The maps below shows a science park in 2008 and the same park today.
The two maps illustrate how the science
park
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 has changed between 2008 and
in
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the present day.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
park
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 experienced significant modifications, with more facilities and new
building
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buildings
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 added. The
park
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become
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became
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 more modern over the period. On the northern side, the research and
the
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development facility has been introduced in the area where a large grassland used to be.
While
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, reception site has been converted into
university
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a university
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 hub, next to the office, the cycle path has been added in different locations in the
park
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 business units remained unchanged
the
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, the
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 car
park
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 and cyber security have been extended in size, to become bigger than before. On the Southern side, the IT
center
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centre
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 has been transformed into
innovation
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an innovation
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center
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centre
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and
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, and
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 the woodland from the left part remained in the current location.
In
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At
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 the bottom of the layout, the new station has been added in the middle of
railway
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the railway
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. Notably, the paths have been linked between all buildings.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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