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The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.

The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.
The diagram shows us how
coffee
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 is produced from
beans
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.
Firstly
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,
coffee
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beans
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 have to be picked from the
coffee
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 tree.
Secondly
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, they are dried in the open air.
Then
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 we have part of roasting
beans
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and
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 after cooling them rapidly. When the
coffee
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beans
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 are cold, we need to use a grand machine which helps to
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grind
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coffee
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. Mix
coffee
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 with hot water ,
then
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 strain the mixture and freeze it. Now
coffee
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 has to be ground one more time
while
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 it’s frozen. And the
last
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 part of producing
coffee
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 is drying in a vacuum. After that
coffee
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 is completely ready to be used. So it goes into jars.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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