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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie charts illustrate the average proportions of
three
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 unhealthy nutrients consumed in
three
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 main meals and snacks.
Overall
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, breakfast contained the lowest shares
in
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of
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 all the nutrients,
whereas
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 dinner had the highest
sodium
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 and saturated fat. In terms of breakfast, the percentages of added
sugar
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 and saturated fat were identical, at 16% each,
while
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sodium
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 was only 14%.
This
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 was considered healthier than other meals.
By comparison
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, the composition of
three
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 nutrients in lunch was quite balanced with 29%
sodium
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, followed by 26% fat and 19% added
sugar
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.
On the other hand
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, snacks accounted for the sweetest item with 42% added
sugar
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.
This
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 figure was double that of saturated fat (21%) and around
three
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 times higher than that of
sodium
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 (14%).
In contrast
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, the amount of
sodium
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 in dinner was roughly twice as much as added
sugar
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, at 43% versus 23%. Dinner
also
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 had the largest percentage of saturated fat among the four meals, at 37%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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