Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are
people
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think
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who think
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the
competition
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at
work
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, at school and in daily life is a positive thing
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while
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, while
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others argue
this
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idea and find
cooperate
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essential more than
competition
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.
This
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easy
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will
discusses
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discuss
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all the views. From my perspective,
i
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I
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believe all
of
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apply
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cooperate
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cooperation
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and
competition
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important
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are important
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to achieve all
what
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that
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we need. On one hand,
cooperation
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is a very important skill, and
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we should
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should all
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all should
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of
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apply
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us
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apply
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have
this
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skill.
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make
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makes
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us
work
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together and meet new
people
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interest
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in what we are doing and working on it.
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, makes a lot of relationships.
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,
cooperation
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is
demand
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in demand
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in most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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careers nowadays. But
also
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it has some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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, in
team
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teamwork
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work
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it will evaluate the project or what it ever
work
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as a
team
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team,
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not
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as individual
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individual
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individuals
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.
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as
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a result , some hard
worker
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workers
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might think it's unfair because they
work
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hard.
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, most of the projects must
do it
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be done
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by
team
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a team
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, so there
is
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apply
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might be
struggle
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a struggle
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sometimes if there are some
of
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members of
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the group
careless
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are careless
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.
On the other hand
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,
competition
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can make us reach what we dream, and make so many achievements. With
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competition
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competition,
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all
people
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will do as much as they can to prove they are better and multitask.
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,
competition
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has
play
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played
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an important role in
development
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the development
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we have now and if continued growth,
will
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it will
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make a lot of difference.
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, the
country's
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country
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and companies try to
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do
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their best to be the best in some aspects. In conclusion, all of
competition
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and
cooperation
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are necessary to develop the world and
makes
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make
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difference
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a difference
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. Must all of
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competition
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the competition
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and
competition
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learned for young
people
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, because it's important to have these two skills.

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structure
Work on a clear plan. Start with short intro, two body parts (one for each view), then end with your view.
coherence
Use linking words like on one hand, on the other hand, and also, but. Keep ties simple.
grammar
Fix errors with grammar and make subject and verb match. Check capital letters and plural forms.
content
Give facts or clear examples that fit the point you make. Do not mix in many ideas in one sentence.
style
Use fewer words and short sentences to be clear.
content
The essay tries to show both views and also a view from the writer.
content
It gives some info on how working with others and with own drive can help.
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