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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the cause? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

In recent years , travelling has become an essential thing for mankind .
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 essay will discuss the incentives for
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 to travel and examine the main causes of
this
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phenomonon
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phenomenon
. Nowadays , Many
people
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 think that travelling abroad is very significant to them . Since they think that
go
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 overseas is
invaluable
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an invaluable
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opportunitie
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opportunity
to discover different
culture
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cultures
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 and learn new things about different
people
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 . Take
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myself
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 as an example ,
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I
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 am always wondering what
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life
look
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looks
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 like in different
region
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regions
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 of the world
,
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.
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the
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apply
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curiosity
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Curiosity
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 is a part of my character
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i am
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I
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 always want to find answers to my questions .
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 ,
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I
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 decided to travel all over the world to find answers to my questions.
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 ,
When
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when
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 we compare the statistical data regarding the figures of travelling in each country , we will find that the number is increasing over
years
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the years
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 . One major cause of
this
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phenomonon
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phenomenon
 is the social media impact . Which
is
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can
shaped
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 our opinions and
changed
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change
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it
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them
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 significantly .
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people
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people's
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 attitudes toward countries
is
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are
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 changing over the decades .
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 , some countries are leaders in
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 field
nowadys
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nowadays
,
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.
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However
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 , if you compare the number of tourists of that country with 3 decades
ago
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ago,
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 you will notice a tremendous difference .
Additionally
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 , the
exisitance
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existence
 of
transportaions
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transportation
especially
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, especially
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 the
plane
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plane,
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make
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makes
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 the process of travelling
accesible
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accessible
 to different
type
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types
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 of
people
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 , and
make
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makes
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 it much easier and cheaper . In conclusion , travelling today is one of the most
prioities
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priorities
 of the
people
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 . Meanwhile , the main cause of the
pouplarity
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popularity
 of travelling is the social-media
affect
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effect
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 and the
accesiblity
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accessibility
 to different
type
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types
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 of
transportaions
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transportation
.

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Make a clear plan: intro that states two parts, body with one idea per paragraph, and a short conclusion.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Check verb forms, spelling and cap letters.
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Give full answer: name the parts of the task and show how travel helps the person.
structure
Use linking words to join ideas: first, also, but, for example, in addition, finally.
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The essay shows an attempt to give reasons for travel and uses a personal example.
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It has some ideas about social media and planes that show travel can be easier.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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