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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

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a basic
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 thing for
people
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should have
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water
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a water
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provides
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 to without payment . I strongly agree statement
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people
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poor
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 it contain
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many consequences
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such
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 as drinking
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unhealthy
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water
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water,
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is
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several diseases.
and
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other
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another
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like
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when
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public
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the public
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get
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gets
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free
charge
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access
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of
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water
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people
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people
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they
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easy
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easily afford
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 to adobe
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buying
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of buying
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water
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on
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nowadays
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the worlds
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worlds
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world
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facing
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is facing
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many
type
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types
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 of
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disease
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one
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 of the
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disease
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diseases
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 is when we
intaking
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intake
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water related
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water-related
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one
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we
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more
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consider
to consumed
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conserving
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water
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say
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nowadays
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people
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 don't care about
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 intake and
that
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which
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lead
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leads
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 to many
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disease
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diseases
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 in their
life
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lives
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.
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this
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says that
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shows
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aware
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are aware
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 of the
consume
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water
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habits
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consumption habits
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on
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 for free
change
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apply
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, many
people
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easy
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easily
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i
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I
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head
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heard
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the
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world
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World Water Association
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water
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 association says that around 20
millions
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million
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people
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affected
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are affected
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to
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by
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basic drinking
water
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facilities
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facilities,
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 especially who come poor
family
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families
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.
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this
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This
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about
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apply
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how much people
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people
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affected
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are affected
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getting
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by getting
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water
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 structure. other that if the government give the
water
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 facilities with no
charges
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charges,
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very
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would be very
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help
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helpful
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 for the
middle classes
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middle-class
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people
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.
contacted
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 the pure
water
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 thing for
people
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to
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every
houses
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house
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 should have
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water
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a water
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 connection that give to
no
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any
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payment
method
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apply
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. I strongly
accepted
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accept
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statement
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the statement
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 because drinking the poor
water
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is lead
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leads
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 to
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apply
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several
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disease
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diseases
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and
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, and
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people
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 can get more financial benefits
mainly
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, mainly
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people
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 who come
form
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from
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the
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apply
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rural
area
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areas
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structure
Plan first. Make a short intro with your view, 2 body parts with one idea each, and a short ending that repeats your view.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check article, verbs, plural, and preps. For example: 'Water is a basic need' 'every home should have free water.'
coherence
Keep ideas clear. One main point per paragraph and a clear link between ideas with 'first', 'also', 'then', 'but'.
content
Give clear and real examples. Simple facts or numbers make the point strong.
spelling
Check spelling and mark the end of each sentence with a full stop. Use capital letters at the start.
stance
You take a clear view on the topic.
content
You give two main ideas (health and money).
content
You try to back up with examples.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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