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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/ flat. Write a letter to your neighbours

Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Singh, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter to convey my
apologise
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apologies
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 for the
noise
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 that was coming from my flat, and I came to know that
its
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it
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 disturbed you a lot
last
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night
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. Actually, yesterday
night
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, my air conditioner was not working well, and
its
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it
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 started making
loud
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a loud
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noise
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. I
try
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tried
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 to call
electrician
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the electrician
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 a number of
time
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times
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, but he did not pick
the
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up the
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 call at
night
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time
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apply
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.
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, I tried to fix it myself, but I was unable to do it. I am really sorry for
inconvenience
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the inconvenience
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 that you faced
last
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night
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,
due to
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that
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the
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 excessive
noise
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. I know
this
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 not only affected your sleep pattern badly, but
also
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makes
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made
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hard it
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it hard
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 for you to focus on your studies.
However
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, I called the electrician in the morning as well. He will come
little
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a little
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 bit late, but till that time I will turn it off. So, you will not
disturb
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be disturbed
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from
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by
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this
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 anymore.
In addition
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 to it, I will
making
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make
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plan
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a plan
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 to install soundproof walls in the near future to avoid the excessive
noise
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. Again, I am really sorry for that and
thankyou
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thank you
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 for your patience. Yours sincerely, Harjeet Kaur.

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grammar and clarity
Use one idea per sentence and keep sentences short.
grammar
Replace 'yesterday night' with 'last night' and 'I try' with 'I tried' to fix tense.
word choice
Use 'I apologize' and 'apology' consistently.
punctuation and word form
Fix small mistakes like 'thankyou' to 'thank you' and 'will turning' to 'will turn'.
tone
Keep a polite and calm tone throughout.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'also' to show flow.
content
Conclude with what you will do next and a thank you.
tone
Polite tone and respect for neighbours.
content
Clear apology and plan to fix issue.
structure
Nice structure: opening, reason, action, closing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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