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Some people think that starting to studying a foreign language in primary schools is better than starting in secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some individuals say that learning a new
language
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 in primary
school
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 is better than starting in secondary
school
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. The main benefit of starting to study a foreign
language
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 at a much younger
age
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 is that they can have an important skill in communication from an early
age
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. Meanwhile, the main drawback is that the children will most likely struggle in their mother
language
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. I agree that the advantages of
this
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 outweigh the disadvantages. The benefit of starting a new
language
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 in primary
school
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 is that children find it easier to absorb new words.
Additionally
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, there is some research that says the human brain is a lot more flexible to adapt verbally at an early
age
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 because
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 that
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 they are adapting to the environment. Another advantage of
this
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 is that speaking a foreign
language
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 from a young
age
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,
for example
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 like English, helps them to open more opportunities as they can participate in international events. As for the disadvantage of children learning a foreign
language
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 is that they will have a hard time switching between their mother
language
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 and the foreign
language
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.
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 it is easier to learn the new words, it is harder to implement
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 home or
school
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 if there is no one to talk to
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 it can cause another communication problem. In conclusion, I believe that learning a new
language
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 brings more benefits
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than
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drawbacks when it is applied correctly and knowing that there are
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disadvantages to
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Your view is clear and you say you agree. Add more real reasons and a clear way to show how it helps kids.
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Give more proof for each point. Use small examples about how kids learn and how to use it at home and at school.
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Use clear first line in each part to show the main idea.
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Fix grammar and bad word use. Use one idea per sentence and simple words.
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End with a short line that restates your view.
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Your view is clear from the start.
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You give reasons for your view and link ideas.
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Some flow from one part to the next is good.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • start
  • early
  • primary
  • secondary
  • language
  • learn
  • practice
  • time
  • more
  • less
  • speaking
  • listening
  • spea
  • class
  • teacher
  • plan
  • good
  • bad
  • problem
  • stress
  • subject
  • life
  • fun
  • confidence
  • habit
  • study
  • future
  • school
  • work
  • could
  • would
  • also
  • but
  • and
  • because
  • these
  • these
  • there
  • their
  • our
  • year
  • your
  • some
  • any
  • these
  • give
  • day
  • most
  • us
  • how
  • why
  • where
  • which
  • can
  • may
  • these
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