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Band 4.5

What qualities do you think are most important for achieving success in life? Provide at least three reasons to justify your

It is often said that
qualities
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 are the tools that build our future. A
persons
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person's
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qualities
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 are things that you achieve in
life
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 by your experiences and beliefs. How can our
qualities
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 be important for achieving
success
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 in our
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life
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lives
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?
Firstly
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, our
qualities
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 are a big part of our everyday
, they
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lives, they
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 often tend to show up in different
life
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 scenarios and situations.
One
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 of the most important
quality
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qualities
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 to have a successful
life
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 is singlemindedness,
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which
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 means focusing on achieving
one
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 goal. It can
also
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 be seen as an act of determination, meaning not giving up and reaching what you want. When you aim for high
goals
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 and have high
expectations
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expectations,
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 it is more likely that you will have to deal with obstacles that you need to overcome, but having enough
courage
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courage,
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 you can easily get past them without any problems.
Often
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 these things cause selflessness, when you only care about your aims and forget to be tolerant towards other people when talking about
life
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 expectations and
goals
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.
Although
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this
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 can be avoided if you have enough respect and tolerance towards others.
For
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example
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 when you are an
athlete
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athlete,
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 it is very important to have mindset where you are very focused on
one
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 particular goal, so you
star
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start
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 working hard, training more, and
eventually
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eventually,
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 after paying attention to
one
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 specific
thing
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thing,
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 you can reach it without
any
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apply
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having any problems.
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, another quality
that is
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 very important for achieving
success
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 is discipline. It means committing to something and sticking to it. When you want to be
successful
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successful,
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 you have to commit to your desire and work towards it.
Success
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 comes from working hard and trying to reach your
goals
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. To illustrate, if a person does not have any courage and dedication
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to
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doing something more challenging or outworking others, how can he be successful in
life
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 without any hard work? To summarise, I believe that successful people are those who have had
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 of hard work,
like
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apply
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enough discipline and singlemindedness. Reaching the
goals
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 and aims they have set their minds to is really difficult and comes with a lot of obstacles,
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that
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which
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 is why not everyone can achieve
success
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.

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improve thesis
Make your main idea clear in the first line. A short thesis helps the reader know your plan.
coherence
Use small links between ideas like also, and, for example to help flow.
examples
Add one more real example to show how the traits help success.
grammar
Check errors and fix simple mistakes. Use short, correct sentences.
conclusion
Finish with a strong end that restates your main idea.
strength
The essay has a clear two-point plan (singlemindedness and discipline).
strength
There are good examples and a hope to explain the point.
strength
There is a closing line that sums up the idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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