The food travels thousand of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think that it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ate local produced food. What extent do the advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

In the contemporary economic market, the food
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grocery stores is being taken from farms that are thousands of kilometres away. Worrying about the impact of transportation
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the
envirenment
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environment
and the benefit to the local economy if
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food has been produced locally, people believe that local production should be encouraged. From my point of view, there is only a little gap between the benefits and drawbacks of food delivery. On the one hand, long delivery of
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to consumers can be explained
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uneven
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distribution of resources across the globe. That means
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some
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need specific conditions to be grown.
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, a carrot.
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vegetable needs a dry area where it can be watered twice / three times apply in a week.
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, constant sunshine and hot weather make up for its taste and productivity.
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, the geographical location of
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.
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some
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are easily
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accessible
to seashore or open water bases, another group of
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do not have. Contrary, some
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are well-provided regarding the agricultural treasures
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vegetables, fruits, and other vegetation can be easily harvested. So, as the British economist, David Ricardo suggests in his book
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economy
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,
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have to trade their
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abundant
resources with others,
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exchanging
them
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another
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goods that they need .
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, some
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as bananas, ananases, or special sorts of fish, have to be brought from overseas.
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, thanks to the
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devoloping
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developing
technologies and new innovations
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everything is
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possible. By bearing in mind
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fact, people could have
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goods locally
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to the regional market.
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process can be realised, life quality in the rural areas will
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, unemployment will be reduced, and the GDP of the whole country will skyrocket, especially in
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countries
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where the dwellers of non-urban areas are more.
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, even
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importantly,
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the reduction of the amount of
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transportation,
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of CO2 will be cut sensibly
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on
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cleaner atmosphere.
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,
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will decrease the amount of traffic
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and road accidents. In conclusion, despite the fact that some
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cannot be harvested in specific areas, they must be transported from abroad to satisfy
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consumers'
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needs.
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, thanks to the cutting-edge technologies, they
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might be manufactured locally, bringing numerous benefits to the flora and fauna of the area.

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grammar
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writing style
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content
Give each idea a clear point and a real example.
structure
End with a short restate of your view and a quick sum of points.
accuracy
Check key word spellings like environment and produced.
structure
The essay uses a two side view with on the one hand / on the other hand.
language use
There is an effort to link ideas with good words like 'furthermore' and 'however'.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • locally sourced
  • seasonal produce
  • nutritional value
  • food variety
  • local economy
  • global trade
  • supply chains
  • economic diversification
  • resilient food systems
  • regional climate
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