Topic: Some people think that people commit crime because of poverty and social problems, while others think it is because of their bad nature. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Some

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groups

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of individuals hold the opinion that

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the reasons

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for

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a crime

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due

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are due

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to poverty and social problems,

while

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others assume that all comes with

bad

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a bad

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nature. In

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essay

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I will discuss both perspectives before expressing my own opinion. On the one hand, we live in a world where all people

equipped

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with material resources inequally and individuals from low socioeconomic backgrounds have to survive, so that they go to extremes.

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, police reports show that a big share of culprits,

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are from

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the lower-class

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lower-class

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, many youngsters can not accept the fact that their parents can not afford

things

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they want, and start

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things

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that do not belong to them, by robbing markets or

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away other people's

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, there are many cases when toddlers from prosperous families with loving parents become

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criminal

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criminals

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, it all starts from

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childhood

when

yongsters

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youngsters

do not know between evil and good, and

consequanly

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consequently

start to hurt animals like cats or dogs. And, of course, parents do not know

about

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what is going on with their children and simply do not expect

evel

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evil

things

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from their beloved ones.

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, social inequality may lead to

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raise

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crime, especially among teenagers, but I personally

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believe

that the evil nature should be taken into account, since it

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contributes to the increase of criminality.

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task response

Your answer has two sides and a view, but the plan is not very clear. Start with a clear thesis in the first sentence and keep one main idea in each paragraph.

task response

Use simple, accurate facts or examples. Some ideas are weak or not shown well.

coherence

Link ideas more clearly. Use topic sentences and linking words to show the order of ideas.

grammar

Many grammar and spelling mistakes. Practice short, correct sentences and fix common errors.

lexical

Some words are not right for the topic. Use common words and avoid hard or rare terms.

task response

You discuss both sides and give your view.

coherence

There is a rough structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

230 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

socio-economic factors
unemployment
inadequate housing
family breakdown
peer pressure
community support
predisposition
aggression
empathy
thrill-seeking behaviors
marginalized communities
multifaceted approach
environmental factors
personal characteristics

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