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The chart below shows the number of households in Canada by their annual income in 2016, 2020, and 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in Canada by their annual income in 2016, 2020, and 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
quantity
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number
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 of
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household
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households
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 in Canada by their yearly
income
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 in the
year
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years
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 2016, 2020, and 2024.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
lower
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lower-income
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income
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household
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households
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(under 50,000dollars)
were
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highly
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significantly
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increase
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 in 2020
,
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on the other hand
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, the
quantity
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number
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 of
higher
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higher-income
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income
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households
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(over 50,000)
were
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apply
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 significantly
grow
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grew
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 in 2024. The
number
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 of
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household
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households
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 with incomes below $25,000 was 20
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millions
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million
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 in 2016,
raising
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rising
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 significantly to 30
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millions
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million
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 in 2020, but
then
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felling
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 slightly to 27
in
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million in
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 2024.
Moreover
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, the quantity of
household
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income
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 between $25,000 and $49,999 was 25
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millions
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million
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 in 2016, increased from 27
in
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million in
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 2020 to 30
in
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million in
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 2024.
In addition
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, the
number
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 with
household
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income
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 between $50,000 and 74,999
was
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apply
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fell from 30
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millions
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million
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 in 2016 to 20
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millions
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million
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 in 2020, but it recovered slightly to 23
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millions
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million
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 in 2024.
Similarly
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, the
number
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 of households with incomes between $75,000 and $99,999 fell to 7 million in 2020, before recovering to 13 million in 2024.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, income, number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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