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Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and for society as a whole.

Each year, millions of
individuals
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 relocate to different countries for various purposes.
Migration
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 has positive effects for
individuals
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 and for society. For
individuals
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, one major advantage is better job opportunities. Many people move to another country to find higher salaries, improved working conditions, or better career prospects.
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 can lead to a higher standard of living and more financial security for their families. Some migrants
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 gain access to better education and healthcare.
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, living in a new country helps people learn new languages and experience different cultures, which can help them grow personally and become more independent.
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,
migration
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 can
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 be difficult.
Individuals
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 may feel homesick and lonely, especially if they leave their families behind. They might
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 face language problems, cultural differences, or even discrimination, which can make it hard to adapt to their new environment. For society,
migration
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 can bring economic and cultural benefits. Migrants often fill important jobs, especially in sectors where there is a shortage of workers. They can contribute to economic growth by paying taxes and starting businesses. Cultural diversity can
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 make a country more interesting and open-minded.
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, a large number of migrants can create pressure on public services
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 as housing, schools, and healthcare.
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,
migration
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 offers many advantages, but it
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 creates challenges that governments need to manage carefully.

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task
Your essay covers the topic well and shows both sides. To move up, add more precise examples or facts from real life and show a clear opinion for each side.
coherence
Link ideas more evenly and plan your paragraphs. Use clear signs ('first', 'also', 'in short') to show how one idea leads to the next.
structure
The essay has a clear focus on both individual and society gains and costs.
cohesion
There are good linking words like However, In addition, On the other hand, Overall.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Migrate
  • Immigrant
  • Emigrant
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Expatriate
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Naturalization
  • Work permit
  • Visa
  • Residence
  • Citizenship
  • Deportation
  • Brain drain
  • Demographic
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural shock
  • Social network
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