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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Nowadays, many
people
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 more than
one
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job
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 to support their life than before
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 they think that only
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one
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job
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has
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is
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 become old trend. In
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 my opinion
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on both
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 pros and
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cons
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also
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 with some demonstrated. First of all, many
people
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 who have only
one
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job
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earning
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 money might have
reason
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reasons
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such
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a high
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 salary, experted in experience in their duties etc. For
instant
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, the engineering careers have
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high wages because the
job
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 need to have specific knowledge, high
responsibilities
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responsibilities,
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although
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and
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expirence
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experience
.
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lead
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to
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them to get enough money and no need
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for more
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job
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jobs
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to do
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. In another way,
people
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 who have
work
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 several jobs
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 have
reasons more
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more reasons
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 than fashion.
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,
people
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working
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work
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 with medium or low incomes that
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then
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the
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 money they
are earning
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earn
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 might not
sufficient
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be sufficient
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 to
supported
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support
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 to families or their lifestyle
so
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, so
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 more
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job
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jobs
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 should be a good choice for them
but
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, but
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 some of them might take another
job
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 for social
or
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reasons or
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 want to
make
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gain
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 more knowledge to
upgraded
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upgrade
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 their
life
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lives
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. In my opinion, I think that working in several jobs is
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a
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ways
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way
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 to do in modern day because of economy and living
cost
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costs
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had
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 changed than
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past
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past,
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while
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wages still not
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improved much
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improving
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. In conclusion,
this
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 that working in
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 or several
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job
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jobs
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should have
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has
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 benefits and negatives
from
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apply
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them and
this
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not
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is not
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 only for
trend
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the trend
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 to
following
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follow
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but
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, but
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 it
depending
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also depends
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 on what they are
respons
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responsible
 for
their
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in their
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 life.

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structure
Plan your essay. Make a quick map with 3 ideas and a quick example for each before you write.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Watch spelling mistakes and form of verbs and nouns.
content
Make each main idea clear and support it with one clear example that fits it.
conclusion
End with a strong last paragraph that restates your view and the main points.
structure
Use linking words to connect ideas in a smooth way.
general
You give your own view and try to discuss both sides.
structure
There is a attempt to use examples and to divide the text into parts.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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