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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, many countries have decided to allow smoking in public places.I strongly agree because it's common to inhale someone else's
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 by mistake,which will harm you more than him.In
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 essay, I'll explain why
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 agree with
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 information. On the one hand, most adults became addicted to smoking , so
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every day , most teenagers see
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 smoking at the ages of 18 or 17, so they become more interested in smoking and may cause them to try it
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,some teenagers may normalise smoking.
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 causing a bunch of health problems to young
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.
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, once you discover
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 of your friends
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 , you'll think
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negative thoughts about them.
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, it's unfair for kids to smell and watch
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smoke
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 in public places,
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 they have the ability to go out of a building or go to a bathroom.
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 it's bad for the environment,plants,atmosphere,and animals.
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 ,they should not let
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smoke
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 in public places,because
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 harm
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 more than
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 harm yourself
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, children under the age of 18 may see other adults
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 and think it's cool.
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 making children want to try.

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structure
Be clear what you think at the start and at the end of the essay.
content
Use one main idea in each paragraph and give a real example from your life.
grammar
Use easy words and short sentences, and fix grammar errors.
writing
Check you spell and use big letters correctly.
structure
You try to use link words like 'On the one hand' and 'To sum up'.
content
You show you know the topic and have a view.
content
Some ideas touch on how smoking in public can harm others.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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