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Should rich nations help the poor nations „if so in what ways.

In
this
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 era, two kinds of nations in the world, developed
society
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societies
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 have more facilities for their community, so most people are wealthy.
In contrast
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, poor
state
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states
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 don't have enough budget to
give
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provide
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 enough facilities to their poor public. In my perception, digitalised people can help poor nations by providing charity for hospitals.
In addition
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, they can help them in education ,
moreover
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,
also
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 by giving them subsidies on
agriculture
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agricultural
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 machines and road-making instruments.
According to
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 the first point of view, the fact that people are dying frequently in poor
countries
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 is because they don't have enough facilities in hospitals. So, we can give them charity in
this
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 way, they can have enough money to buy medical machines, hire good doctors and surgeons as well
and
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 they can able to provide free medicine to patients. In 2019, when
coronavirus
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the coronavirus
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 came , particularly poor
countries
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 didn't have enough money to buy the vaccine. So, the United Kingdom and other developed
countries
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 decided to support needy regions by providing them with enough money.
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, from my perspective, rich regions can support them through the education sector by giving them knowledge about scientific problems and solutions. In
this
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 way, they can able to broaden their knowledge about the world.
Last
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 year, American scientists added a proficient syllabus in books and appealed to the government to distribute it in those
countries
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 that needed it most.
Secondly
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, we can help them by providing them subcity on machinery,
for example
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, in the agriculture sector, to make roads and to do mining in the mountains. It can play a pivotal role in making them stable in the economy.
According to
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human
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humans
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, we are all equal , and to save humanity, we need to help each other in every aspect of life. I am certain, in
this
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 way we will overcome every chaos.

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planning
Plan before you write. Use a clear intro, 3 main ideas in separate paragraphs, and a short ending.
language
Put one idea in each paragraph. Use tense correctly and fix big grammar errors.
content
Be clear about your view. Say if you think yes or no, and give why.
examples
Give more true facts or examples that fit the point you make.
content
You show many ways rich nations can help poor nations.
structure
You use 'Secondly', 'Similarly' to link ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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