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Writing Samples
Band 3

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflet the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 effect seems to rest on brain regions tied to hunger and drive, and the authors note “where and how
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 occurs is unclear.” GLP-1 drugs cut appetite but often cause nausea. Though tirzepatide, a dual agonist, is milder on the gut, which may permit higher doses and better results. Still,
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 tolerance alone, so the team looked at how both hormones work in concert in the brain to bring about that shared effect.

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task
State a clear view about the question at the start and keep it to the end.
structure
Plan with intro, body, and end. Tell what you will talk about and then finish with a short summary.
linguistic
Use simple link words like and, but, so to join ideas and guide the reader.
content
Add stronger facts from the text and show how they prove your point.
language
Check grammar and use short, direct sentences to keep home.
content
The passage shows a clear idea of how the two drugs may act in the brain.
structure
The text uses a careful tone and quotes to present ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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