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Writing Samples
Band 4

Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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task response
You do not answer the task. You need to tell if tech makes life less or more stress. State your view at the start and keep it in the essay.
structure
Make a plan. First add a short intro, then 2 or 3 clear ideas with examples, and finish with a short end.
topic
Stick to the main topic. If you write about tech, keep it about tech and stress in life, not on brain drugs.
examples
Add real life examples from your life or common facts that show stress in use of tech.
language
Use simple and plain words. Use short sentences. Check grammar and linking words like 'and', 'but', 'also'.
content
The text uses quotes from a study to back up points.
structure
There is a clear link to what the study shows, with more than one idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Labour-saving
  • Devices
  • Communication
  • Technology
  • Easier
  • Difficult
  • Stress
  • Save
  • Time
  • Effort
  • Focus
  • Important
  • Activities
  • Manage
  • Daily
  • Tasks
  • Efficiently
  • Overwhelmed
  • Expectation
  • Connected
  • Pressure
  • Anxiety
  • Feelings
  • Individuals
  • Usage
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