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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many people argue that pupils should not be forced to learn another language at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The study has a few limitations. In their words, “our study recorded limited distribution after a single injection of fluorescently labelled TZP,” so the reach of the drug may differ with later doses.
Likewise
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, their scan of brain activity relied on single-dose data, which could have skewed the result. They add that methods used to study GIPR in the rodent brain don’t quite line up, and
while
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Show a clear view. State what you think and say why. Add a short ending that repeats your view.
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Make the flow smooth. Use linking words and make one idea in each sentence. Put ideas in a clear order.
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The writing stays on the topic of study limits.
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It uses real details, like the single injection and single dose data.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingualism
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural exposure
  • language retention
  • mandatory education
  • interconnected world
  • compulsory classes
  • academic workloads
  • tailored education
  • effective communication
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