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Band 4

Instead of revealing the truth, the mass media very often misguides people. What are the reasons behind this and the visible effects on the society at large?

It won'
t
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 be a surprise to say that
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gotten
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obtained
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 from mass
media
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pretty
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, pretty
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often
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often,
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 can'
t
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 be called reliable. Everybody
accept
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accepts
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missinformation
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misinformation
 and fake news as a part of daily life.
People
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 get irritated by it, but still don'
t
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 tend to change anything. Even more, though every person seems to be aware of it, lots of them still believe in
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this fakes
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these fake
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 time to time. So why does
this
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happens
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happen
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?
Firstly
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, the lie can be created by the very start,
be
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by
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 the journalist, copywriters
etc
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, etc
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. The reason for
that is
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 to get
attetion
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attention
 from the crowd. The more
people
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 buy
newspaper
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newspapers
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, click
to
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 the article,
share
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and share
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with
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it with
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 their friends and relatives, the more money the author will get. So, that's it, just because of the
greedyness
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greediness
 some
individual
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individuals
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 are ready to deceive and create fakes, usually dirty and
unpleasent
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unpleasant
. But that
not
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is not
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 always the case. Sometimes, because the
information
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 goes from agent to
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agent,
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 it changes a lot.
This
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 happens not intentionally, just
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a human
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 factor,
people
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 can'
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to
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remain
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retain
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 all the details the same as they were. And though it sounds not so serious, the
information
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 can change
polarly
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radically
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to
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from
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 how it was in the beginning. The effect on society is very clear.
People
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 believe
to
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apply
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that lie, and often it's hard to find the truth in
these
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 endless amount of
information
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in
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on
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 the Global Web. Opinions can be changed by the wrong
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, and
this
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makes
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has
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 no great impact on their lives. Someone's reputation and career can be ruined. Relations between friends and
family
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family,
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 too. All of
this
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 is a result of
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the mass
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media
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's
misguidnes
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misguidance
. So,
i
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I
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 think to avoid
such
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 problems, every person should educate themselves to have critical thinking and have good
media
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 literacy. It will significantly reduce the effect that all the lies from
mass
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the mass
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media
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 have on society.

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task response
Task response: The essay partly answers the question. Add a clear view in the introduction and use a main idea in each paragraph. Give more full detail to each idea and give clear examples.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words to show how ideas go together. Have a clear topic sentence in each paragraph and end with a short conclusion for the paragraph.
content
There is a clear talk about a problem of wrong news.
content
The essay keeps to one main idea in each paragraph, and gives some relations between ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Misinformation
  • Media Conglomerates
  • Clickbait
  • Editorial Slant
  • Fake News
  • Cognitive Bias
  • Critical Thinking
  • Fact-checking
  • Social Fabric
  • Echo Chamber
  • Public Discourse
  • Disinformation Campaigns
  • Media Literacy
  • Censorship
  • Agenda-setting
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