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Some people think sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn teamwork. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's competitive world,
sports
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 play a vital role in
children
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's development. Some people believe that
sports
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 teach
children
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 how to compete and manage their ambitions,
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 others argue that they help
children
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 learn how to cooperate with others. On the one hand, some parents believe that, in order to be successful,
children
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’s main priority should be being competitive. They think
sports
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 teach
children
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 discipline, responsibility, and the importance of hard work.
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, they put a lot of pressure on their
children
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 not only to win but
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 to improve their individual performance.
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,
this
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 constant pressure often makes
children
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 feel anxious and stressed, which is not good for their mental well-being.
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, when parents expect their
children
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 to win every match or competition, it can cause disappointment and frustration.
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, many
children
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 may lose their interest in
sports
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 or play only to please their parents rather than for enjoyment.
On the other hand
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, some people believe that
sports
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 are valuable because they teach teamwork and cooperation. Through team
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,
children
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 learn not only how to share success but
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 how to handle failure together. They support and motivate each other, which helps them build confidence and empathy.
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, when playing football or basketball,
children
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 communicate, make decisions together, and develop a strong sense of belonging. These experiences not only make
sports
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 more enjoyable but
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 help them build lifelong friendships. In conclusion,
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 competition in
sports
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 can teach
children
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 how to work hard and stay focused, I believe teamwork is more beneficial because it teaches them to cooperate, communicate, and respect others.
Sports
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 should be a source of fun and learning, not stress or pressure.

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task response
Tie each point to a clear example and show how it supports your view.
cohesion
Use simpler connect words and shorter sentences to help flow. Avoid long, hard phrases.
examples
Add more real life or school life examples to strengthen your argument.
task response
Clear stance and balance between views.
cohesion
Good paragraph order and use of linking phrases.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competition
  • teamwork
  • individual sports
  • team sports
  • perseverance
  • resilience
  • goals
  • support
  • responsibilities
  • social bonds
  • community
  • communicate
  • trust
  • group effort
  • balanced perspective
  • well-rounded skill set
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