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Band 4

At many companies today, applicants are often rejected due to old age. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In
this
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 contemporary era, numerous national and multinational companies prefer to recruit young people rather than
elders
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older people
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. They reject the applications of old people quite often. In my
prespective
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perspective
, the aforementioned notion is indeed a negative development for reasons as shall be elaborated presently. The primary reason is that companies will lack the experienced and
well- trained
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well-trained
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 workers. Old people have worked a lot in their young age
owing
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, owing
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 to which they often
contains
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contain
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spactulas
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special
 experience

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content
The essay argues that old workers are needed for rich work, but it does not show well why this is bad. Add clear main ideas and give one or two simple examples.
structure
Make a plan before you write. Start with a short view of your stance, then give 2 or 3 reasons. Use simple link words to show the link of ideas.
language
Watch the form. Use correct word form and spellings. Use simple, clear sentences.
content
The writer shows a clear view that the topic is about old job age.
structure
There is some use of connect words to link ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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