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The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places What are the serioud problems? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

The given diagram outlines the steps taken in the production of
ethanol
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 from
being
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a
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corn
up
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until it becomes a fuel . It is clear from
diagram
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the diagram
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 presented that there are 10 stages being followed to have the final product.
To begin
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 with, the corn is
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firstly
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 stored somewhere. It is
then
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 milled before cooking it. From there, it is cooked using water for a period of four hours. Moving forward, in the next stage, the corn is
then
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 fermented for two days. As the process of producing
ethanol
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 continues, the solid
by product
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 is
seperated
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separated
 to become liquid (
ethanol
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). After that, the watery product goes
under
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through
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 purification for five hours. The purified fuel is
then
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 taken for storage before
transporting
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it
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to the final destination. It can be seen from the diagram that cooking takes the least
of
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time as compared to fermenting and purifying
ethanol
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which
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, which
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 take 48 and 5 hours respectively.

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task response
Task: You describe some steps and give numbers. You should name all ten steps and say what each one does. Add a short intro to say what the chart shows and a short wrap up at the end.
coherence
Flow: Use clear words to show order. Start with 'First', 'Next', 'Then', 'After that', 'Finally' to link steps. This makes the text easy to read.
structure
The text shows a clear list of steps in order.
data
It includes some times for the steps, which helps.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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