Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In the prevailing era, the role of

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is a topic of hot debate. It is an argued issue whether granting

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the right to make choices in everyday matters can lead to self-centeredness or

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benficial

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beneficial

for them.

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essay will explore both viewpoints. In my opinion,

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, freedom should be given to them

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they

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must be a limit. On the one hand, those who believe that

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should not be permitted to make their choices on everyday matters argue that

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approach can result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. These individuals may not have a sense of

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towards others, and they

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find

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difficulties

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to sacrifice for the better life of others.

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, some believe that

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should have the right to make

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on everyday matters that affect them.

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phenomenon can not only enhance their

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skill but

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promote independence.

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children

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allowed to choose clothes, they will express their individuality. I believe that

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should have the permission to make decisions

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their everyday life

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within a reasonable limit.

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children

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need to learn the importance of compromise and social

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responsibilities

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crucial to give them freedom to express themselves. By doing

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, they can develop self-confidence, and it is important to make them

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good

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some argue that allowing

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to make decisions can lead to self-centeredness, other believes that it is cardinal for their development.

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, I believe that they should be allowed to make choices on their everyday basis within a reasonable limit to promote self-dependence,

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, and many more.

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structure

Plan your essay. For each side give 1-2 clear points and a small example.

grammar

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lexical

Fix word and spelling mistakes so your meaning is clear.

content

Add more proof for the views, not just one idea.

content

You show both sides and give your own view.

coherence

You use 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to mark sides.

coherence

There is an easy flow with intro, two body parts and a conclusion.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

287 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Autonomy
Consequence-awareness
Self-centered
Informal decision-making education
Child development
Age-appropriate choices
Cognitive growth
Fostering independence
Parental guidance
Societal norms
Interpersonal consideration
Balance of freedom
Individualism versus collectivism
Experience-based learning

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